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Monday, January 14, 2013

Nearly The End of The world

This is Brocks latest peice of writing, The first paragraph of the story he actually wrote himself, whilst the rest he dictated to someone.
I am very proud how far he has come and that he is willing to have a go.

If I was to write this peice exactly how he wrote( without correcting his spelling) you would see where he is struggling, but with a little perservenece and enchouragement I am sure he will get better as time goes on.

Please read this wonderful story from a boy, with what you will see is a vivid imagination and we would love to hear some feed back.

Nearly the End of The World
By Brock age 10 yrs

It all started at our soccer match, we were losing by two goals, there was ten minutes on the clock,
I got one goal in time.
The whole stadium fell, I ran to the side.
There was me and five other people who survived.
I looked and my friend Jack who was hanging off the edge.
Jack slipped , I just caught him by the tip of his fingers, then all hell went loose, a massive robot with a laser started shooting at the stadium.
The laser was pointing at my friend Jack, it fired, I pushed Jack out of the way and the laser missed. Then the laser fired at me, it missed me because I dodged the laser beam.

Then the army came, the army started firing at the robot with everything they've got, but didn't even make a scratch.
The robot started shooting at the tanks, they all blew up.

The laser then shot another soccer player with a different type of laser which made him incinerate, where nothing was left but his bones.
Jack and I were shocked . 
We tried to get out of the entrance but it was blocked until one of the tanks shot the entrance which blew the rocks away.

The laser started shooting at us and we bolted to the exit, and then we knew our life was on the line.
The laser shot again at Jack, it got him in the chest.
Jack incinerated, nothing left but his bones.

I was still running for the exit. I got outside, I was so so upset over losing my best friend Jack.
I was determined to find out who sent this robot and to kill them.
I found a message coming down from the sky in a letter. It said...........

Dear Brock,
We are sending a massive wave of Aliens 
to exterminate you, for getting away
from our massive robot.
                               your sincerely
                               The Red Skull

I was completely out of my mind after reading this letter. 
I just couldn't believe my eyes when I looked up the massive massive wave of Aliens was approaching, armed with ray guns, death guns and incinerating guns.

I bolted to my motor bike and sped away. "Where am I going to go?" I thought, I looked up and saw my friend Alex about to be shot by an Alien ray gun.
I grabbed a baseball bat and scooped it up from the ground, when I drove past the Alien and whacked him across the head as hard as I could.
His head exploded, green gunk went everywhere. 
I turned around and picked Alex up and grabbed the Ray gun from the headless Alien.

The headless Alien started to chase me on my motorbike. Alex shot the headless Alien with the Ray gun and it blew up.
We drove off.

I turned on my rocket boosters on my bike and flew with Alex on the back of the bike. We put on our space helmets, we flew up to space. 
Thankfully space helmets have a never ending oxygen supply.

We flew up to my ginormous base that has machine guns and ray guns all over it.
We flew into the ginormous space ship.
When we got inside we saw Alex BB 
Alex BB was ready for us. he said "Do you want me to set Red Alert Captain?"
I said "No we are fine"
Alex BB said "Okay Sir"
Alex was amazed. He fainted!

Alex woke up in the medical area.
He opened the door and saw me waiting for him. He was really upset because his parents were still down there. He said to me
I said "I've got it covered"
Then his parents walked through the door.
"Mum, Dad, I thought I lost you" said Alex.
I smiled, then walked off.

Alex ran up to me and said ' Thank you"
Alex followed me to the control centre. We saw big explosions coming from Earth.
I said "Get out of here fast as you can, use hyperspace if you wish"
We must end this horrible war someday. Until the space ship used hyperspace we flew to Mars.

I went to the laboratory, one of Jack's bones was there being examined I said "Quick use the reverse cycle on the Laser gun on the bone"The next minute Jack comes back to life.
Jack says"What am I doing here?"
Jack starts to go crazy. 
Jack then realises he is safe " Am I on a spaceship? 
I said "Yes"
One of the nurses said " Should I show him around?"
I said "Yes you may"
I said to Jack " The nurse will show you around." Jack said " Ok".

I went back to the command centre, there was a massive wave of Aliens approaching. 
I set the ship on red alert. All the Alien ships started firing at us.
I said" Fire"

The next minute there was a massive war going on, Good versus Evil.
All of our gun ships were flying out getting ready for battle.
The Alien pod ships were coming towards our ship.
Our gun ships were shooting at the Alien gunships.
The Alien gunships were shooting back at us. 
This battle went on for hours, it seemed like days. I wanted to end the horrible war.
I said "Fire the massive Laser at the ship" 
It was a one off shot , so I had to choose my aim carefully.

I called all of my pod ships in. 
When all of the pod ships were in, I fired the massive laser at the Alien Mother ship.
All of the Alien pod ships stopped. 
We saw all of the Aliens dead.
I yelled out " Victory Is Ours"
We returned back to Earth, everyone is cheering.
The End.

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